Lord of the Flies corrections

Lord of the Flies

Corrections

 

1. Children are missing after plane accident. They hardly survive in uninhabited island. They are divided two groups. One is elected Ralph as leader, the other elected Jack as leader. They regularly collide over decisions. finally Jack's group kills Ralph's group except Ralph.

2. Ralph : Leadership , Equality , Peace , Nokill

 Jack : Cruel , Power , Murder , Desire to be recognized by children

3. I think the movie show human nature. Human have a lot of freedom, they erupt human nature. For example, At first Jack dosen't want kill friends. But finally Jack dosen't mind about it. So human has evil everyday. We must think about it.

 

1) Describe the setting.

A plane fell down. there are some children in plane. children were isolated in uninhabited island. they made two groups for survival. they came into conflict each other.

 

2) Describe two of the characters.

One character is Ralph. he is intelligent so he became a leader.

the other character is Jack. he is ambitious so he disappointed when Ralph became a leader. Later, Jack lead some children who support him.

 

 3) What do you think about this movie?

 I feel discomfort because I seem see dark side in human. this movie shows human nature. as time goes on, they reveal their true colors. for example. later, Jack committed a murder. he didn't feel of guilt. this movie made me bitter.

 

1) Describe the setting.

Flight accident is happen and childrens are isolated in island. And the island is an uninhabited island. And childrens make two group. One group's leader is Ralph and the other group's leader is Jack

 

 

 

2) Describe two of the characters.

Ralph try to suevive many children's. And peaceful leader. He have a positive mind.

I think Jack is a tyrant. he ignore Piggi. And he have a negitive mind. I think Jack's inside is shrouded in fear. But he didn't expresse his mind. And he act as strong.

 

3) What do you think about this movie?

I think this movie's meaning is people reveal brutality by fear. And fear make a Social cut - throat gangsik. And broke the rule, and don't judgement by rational.

 

 

 

Lord of the Flies

A plane crashes in the ocean.  The survivors, who are mostly school children of various ages, use a raft to reach an uninhabited island.  There are beaches and small hills on the island.  The shoreline is either beaches or rocks.  The island is covered with tropical trees, some of which are banana trees.  

Ralph becomes the leader of the group because he is the most responsible member.  He is kind to the younger children.  He is loyal and trustworthy.

Jack enjoys breaking the rules.  He is cruel – especially to Piggy. 

Piggy is overweight.  He is not in good shape.  He is, however, intelligent, rational, and calm.

I think this movie tells us a lot about the dangerous side of human nature.  It also shows that rules are an important part of society.

Lord of the Flies

1)  Describe the setting.

2)  Describe two of the characters.

3)  What do you think about this movie?

Week Three Corrections

Buyeo is located in the middle of Korea.  There is not very famous. But I'm very proud of my hometown.There is very important place in history. There was a capital of Bakjae. There is so many tourist attraction.

 

There     location      I live there.

 

There is

There are     existence

 

I grew up Incheon. There is a major traffic point. because There has international airport and harbor

 

I grew up Incheon.

In + a city

I grew up in Incheon.

 

There is a major traffic point.

Incheon is a major traffic point.

 

Because

Conjunctive adverb     It also joins two sentences.

Incheon is a major traffic point because Incheon has an international airport and a harbor.

 

Because I'm an introvert, It is hard to speak in English to someone.

It

It

 

 

If anyone wanna play soccer with me, just tell me!

 

Form    anyone     third person singular      base form s + es

 

Want to  

“wanna”

 

I want to play soccer.

 

Wanna, gonna, etc.         NOT the standard written form.  You can find in chatrooms, text message etc.

 

My merit is that I am prudent.  Because of this merit, I don't make a rash decision.  But, ironically it is demerit that i have a lot of things on my mind.

 

Incorrect use of a conjunction.   but

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

And my another Hobby, computer games.

 

 

 

 

 

I like suddenattack so much that i played all day long last year.  So i couldn`t studied well....... But i really like my school. aren`t you think so too?

suddenattack       Sudden Attack

much that i played          Capitalize the pronoun I.

year.  So                             Incorrect use of a conjunction

....... But i really like

 

I really like my school. Don’t you?            Tag questions ask for agreement.

 

 

 

 

 

My favorite movie is ‘Dead Poets Society’. So My motto is ‘carpe diem’ that mean seize the day.

So

Incorrect use of a conjunction

 

that mean

form         third singular subject + base form + s or es

 

I’m from the south korea. I grew up in a state called Gwangju.

south korea

capitalize the names of countries

 

Some country names use ‘the.’     The United States, the United Kingdom, the Philippines

 

 

When I get diet, I do some exercise ( jogging etc ). At this time, I loose weight and my body get more healtier.

I get diet

Go on a diet

 

I do some exercise ( jogging etc ).

Like, such as, for example

I do some exercise, like jogging.

 

I loose weight

Wrong word      loose\

Correct word    lose

 

my body get

form         third person singular + base form + s or es

 

more healtier

form of a comparative adjective

Healthy, healthier

 

When the opportunity, i wants to do boxing later.

 

When the opportunity

Missing subject\

Missing verb

When I have the opportunity,

 

i wants to do boxing later

Capitalize I

Form       first singular subject + base form

 

How to be healthy, first, I evenly eat a lot of food.

 

How to be healthy

Rhetorical question,  a question that doesn’t expect to be answered. 

 

first

 

Don’t use rhetorical questions.

 

I evenly eat a lot of food.

I don’t know what this means.

 

 

I should exercise every day, because These days Increased my body weight.

 

These

These doesn’t need to be capitalized.

 

Increased

Increased doesn’t need to be capitalized.

 

These days Increased my body weight

These days I’m gaining weight.

 

 

 

Jogging and push ups on the night

Get up early in the morning.

To ride a school bus

Eat slowly,eat evenly

 

Jogging and push ups on the night

Missing subjects missing verbs

I go jogging and I do push ups at night.

 

Get up early in the morning.

To ride a school bus

Missing subject

 

I get up early in the morning to ride the school bus.

 

Eat slowly,eat evenly

I eat slowly.

 

eat evenly

I don’t understand what this means.

 

I like every exercise and activity! so I`m enough healthy

 

 

!       exclamation point          goes at the end of a sentence not in the middle

 

I`m enough healthy

Word order

 

Enough + a noun.      I drink enough water.

 

Adjective + enough      I’m healthy enough.

 

I don't now why that deleted. Sorry to Proffessor So Now I replay to write assingment.

 

I replay to write

rewrite

week 2 corrections

Week 2 corrections

And I sometimes play food volleyball with my friends.

Incorrect use of a conjunction

I think the best way to keep fit is not eat too much. So if i were hungry, i didn't eat too much.

I think the best way to keep fit is not eat too much.

Form           to + not + base form

I think the best way to keep fit is to not eat too much.

Incorrect use of a conjunction

I think the best way to keep fit is not eat too much, so if i were hungry

if i were hungry, i didn't eat too much.

Not real, but possible             conditional

If I were hungry, I wouldn’t eat too much.

I like playing basketball, so I play a basketball with my friends at weekend.

Play basketball

Exercise is a great way to keep fit. I always do fifty push ups and I play table tennis 2 times a week. I run when I feel good. I sometimes play badminton with my friends at the courts near my apartment

Nice job!!

I sometimes walking and go jogging at night.

Missing verb

Go walking

I usually eat rice, eat fruit.

I usually eat rice and fruit.

I usually eat rice and I eat fruit.

 

 

 

Actually, I seldom exercise and play sports.

seldom

other frequency adverbs        rarely, hardly, often, frequently

Good job!

I often stretch muscles of legs.

I often stretch my leg muscles.

In fact, I do seldom excercise for keep fit regularly. It doesn't mean 'I don't like excercise'. I just do excercise for fun.

Word order

I seldom do exercise

for keep fit regularly

to keep fit

I wake up every morning and 30 minutes in the morning and exercise before going to push up the habit of more than 10 times also use the stairs instead of using the elevator and walk to the nearest distance.

Don’t use Google Translate.

I like play table tennis, badminton. But nowdays I don't do exercise,.Because I'm busy.

Form

Like + to + base form, like + base form + ing

Incorrect use of a conjunction

It is little tired but I can feel that my body is cleansed.

Form

Tired                base form + ed, base form + ing         can be used as adjectives.

Usually, base form + ed describes  people.  Usually, base form + ing describes things.

It is a little tiring but …….

I’m very excited to attend this evening class.   This evening class is very exciting.

 

I sometimes do martial arts, takkeon.

I sometimes do takkeon.

To sleep enough and to eat healthy food is also important way to keep fit but Koreatech don't allow that.

Form simple present tense

Subject + don’t or doesn’t + base form\

   Koreatech = third person singular\

Koreatech doesn’t allow that

Even though you sleep well and take exercise every day, if you eat unhealthy food like a junk food or eat only what you want, you will get sick.

take exercise

do exercise

Usually I go to bed at 2A.M., so I'm so tired every morning.

Nice job!

I agree, jason.

jason

Jason.  Capitalize the names of people, even the names of unimportant people like your English teacher.

I always drink water,and it keeps my fit very well.

it keeps my fit

It keeps me fit

I also do push ups in my spare time. I do push ups some. But I often do.

Incorrect use of a conjuction.

push ups some

word order        / I do some push ups.

I often do.

Missing object              /     I often do them.